Hey people! I wore this poem in two parts – the first part in the afternoon and the second part in the evening after I got up from a very unsatisfying partial slumber! Anyways I am posting it and I am open to all your criticisms and comments (in fact I am looking forward to hearing it!)
I am writing to you,
Not to say,
The weather is beautiful,
I long to walk, anywhere far,
With you by my side,
Holding hands and leaving burdensome thoughts,
With their burdensome owners.
Not to say,
I love yesterday's moon,
Loved it so much that I think,
We should make it our home,
Whose surface has seen no blood or hate.
Not to say,
I detest whatever I see,
This great bazaar we call life,
Where even air has a price,
And everyone is yet another
Faceless mannequin, a product up for sale.
Not to say,
I hate fat faced men,
Who speak of chastity,
Sleeping with the devil behind closed doors.
I hate them as much as I love you.
But to say,
I love you,
to say the world is ugly,
but your beautiful,
more so than you know,
than you will ever know.
Yup it is lame but i gotta keep the blog alive!!!
Please comment! Cya :-)
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7 comments:
I seriously think you should stop underestimating yourself. It doesn't look nice when you tell how lame your poem is. Let the reader's decide it and set your standards. Stop being a wimp :). I mean all of this in good spirit
Ur seriously same in the real life as mentioned in the poem
who are u? i like names . . . how do u know weather i am the same in real life or not? me confused ...
Hai Siddu,
well written
despite my poor reading skills, I would say it was good...
By the way, let the others decide what they make of your posts.
By the way, the poem is cute :)!
The poem is good but you are cribbing for attention by trying to underestimate yourself
I like the poem, it good!
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